Thursday, 16 August 2018

Beach Poem

walt use descripive words in our writting and make the reader fell a certin way.

3 comments:

  1. Wow Sapphire that is really good. I think people should clean after them selves so all the animals can live. Maybe next time you should write more about the good side of the beach.

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  2. Kia Ora Sapphire. I agree that people should pick up their rubbish so the animals can enjoy life too. When my class went to the rocky shore we found a lot of rubbish as well. I think you should add some more language features next time. Ka Pai!

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  3. Good Work Sapphire, I really enjoyed how you said where the waves crash like two cars colliding together. I agree that there should not be litter on the seashore.
    From Summer

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